雅思作文批改(十一篇)
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雅思作文批改(十一篇)
无论是身处学校还是步入社会，大家都尝试过写作吧，借助写作也可以提高我们的语言组织能力。大家想知道怎么样才能写一篇比较优质的范文吗？下面我给大家整理了一些优秀范文，希望能够帮助到大家，我们一起来看一看吧。
雅思作文批改篇一
write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.
sample answer:
the given pie charts shows data on the main energy sources in the united states of america for two decades. as is presented in the pie charts, oil was the main energy source for the usa both on 80s and 90s.
according to the given data, oil was the main energy source in the usa which was 42% in 1980. the second largest energy source in this decade was the natural gas which supplied 26% of total energy in the same period. then coal supplied more than 20 percent energy demand in usa while hydroelectric power and nuclear power both supplied 5% of the total energy.
in the next decade, the nuclear power produced one tenth of total energy demand and that was almost double that it was in the previous decade. the hydroelectric power as an energy source remained unchanged as it provided 5% of total energy demand in this decade also. the two other main sources for energy in the usa remained almost unchanged in this decade and those two sources were coal and natural gas. finally the use of oil as an energy sources reduced to 33%, which is almost 10% less than the previous decade, but remained the largest source albeit the reduction in this 90s decade.
in summary, the use of oil and coal had reduced and their places as energy sources were replaced by the use of nuclear power in the usa.
雅思作文批改篇二
some people believe that students who want to go to university after graduation from high school should have about one years time to get a job to obtain work experience or have a travel to enlarge their vision.
do you agree or disagree? what is your opinion?
high school students who intend to study at university should attend tertiary education after graduation. to spend one years time doing a job to acquire work experience or to travel for broadening ones vision is, to my mind, a waste of time and energy.
first, university education is the continuation of high school education for those students who want to pursue their learning at an advanced level. a break of one year from academic study will probably weaken ones memory of what has been learned, especially for those who will study such theoretical subjects as mathematics, physics or chemistry.
besides, many nations have established one examination that all students must pass to qualify for admission to a university. for example, in china there is a college entrance examination. anyone who fails in the examination will be denied of admission into a university.
furthermore, one years work or travel does not help students much in their academic studies at university because it is unpredictable for ones work experience to be integrated into ones studies of specific subjects, to say nothing of traveling experience. even if some subjects, such as mba, require students to have work experience, one years work experience, however, is not sufficient to meet the requirements of three or five years, and ones work experience should, after all, be related to management.
雅思作文批改篇三
in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
it is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break form studying after graduating from high school. the trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.
the reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge ad experience of the world. by contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. they tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
however, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. they may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university overall, i think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.
my view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. that is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
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雅思作文批改篇四
task：some people argue that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and what extent do you agree or disagree?
sample answer：
in recent years, animal protection has become an issue of concern. people take different attitudes towards the increasing attention and expenditure on wildlife conservation. some people suggest that the spending should be redirected to helping other fields in society. i agree with the view that the investment in wildlife protection is not worthwhile.
animals, as a key component of the whole food chain, have a profound impact on the sustainability of an ecosystem. as we known, every kind of animals plays an important role in natural balance. for instance, the demise of any species will lead to the growth or decline of other species. in some extreme cases, some species may at the verge of extinction such as dodo bird. if people did not take actions to protect wildlife as soon as possible, we humans would be affected in the end.
however, there are more issues that we need to focus in our society rather than protecting animals. in current social context, the primary task is still to improve living standards since there are many people living under the poverty line. only when people are in a good living condition, can they pay attention to other social problems. besides, technology and education are another two aspects of governments to concern. these two industries accelerate the development of society, which will provide a better protection for wildlife in turn.
in conclusion, although the animal is a significant part of ecosystem, it is better for governments to invest more finance and resources in other social problems.
雅思作文批改篇五
in recent years, there has been growing interest in therelationship between equality and personal people believe that individuals can achieve more inegalitarian societies. others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
平等社会个人成就大；放任自由发展的社会个人成就大。你认为呢?
in my opinion, an egalitarian society is one in which everyone has the same rights and the same opportunities. i completely agree that people can achieve more in this kind of society.
education is an important factor with regard to personal success in life. i believe that all children should have access to free schooling, and higher education should be either free or affordable for all those who chose to pursue a university degree. in a society without free schooling or affordable higher education, only children and young adults from wealthier families would have access to the best learning opportunities, and they would therefore be better prepared for the job market. this kind of inequality would ensure the success of some but harm the prospects of others.
i would argue that equal rights and opportunities are not in conflict with peoples freedom to succeed or fail. in other words, equality does not mean that people lose their motivation to succeed, or that they are not allowed to fail. on the contrary, i believe that most people would feel more motivated to work hard and reach their potential if they thought that they lived in a fair society. those who did not make the same effort would know that they had wasted their opportunity. inequality, on the other hand, would be more likely to demotivate people because they would know that the odds of success were stacked in favour of those from privileged backgrounds.
in conclusion, it seems to me that there is a positive relationship between equality and personal success.
雅思作文批改篇六
其次回答时可以尽量分层次的梳理，比如问到中国人喜欢的植物时，可以按照不同人群的特点来总结概括。
下面就是针对favorite photo的话题举例的两个part3 的答案参考
1. what’s the advantages and disadvantages of taking photos with smartphones?
思路分析 ： 优点更容易总结， 例如方便携带，更容易传输;缺点是失去了拍照的瞬间性，很多摆拍的照片没有更多的纪念意义
well, the first benefit of taking photos with smartphones would be easy transmission. it’s very handy to share a picture with friends as long as there is internet available. it could be even easier if two mobiles are both iphones, thanks to the airdrop.
also, compare to the digital cameras which are usually quite bulky, smartphones on the other hand are very portable. and all the functions work automatically which means even if you don’t know anything about photography, there is still good chances to craft nice phones.
talking about the disadvantages, the only thing i can think of would be that people may not treasure pictures as memories that much as before.
a snap shot serves to crystallize the important moment in your life and that moment lasts for the length of a breath. people are unprepared to be filmed and their emotions are open to interpretation afterwards.
but using smartphones, people tend to take several at the same time with the same pose, and to filter out the best one. i think it lose the real meaning of recording the true life to some extent.
2. what is the benefit of learning painting for children?
思路分析 ： 发展孩子的想象力从而培养他们的创造力是学习绘画带来的最直接的好处，同时也可以让孩子还学去欣赏生活中的美好，进而更加尊重生命。
first of all, painting is the easiest way for children to express their imagination. so learning to do that would definitely strengthen their ability to think outside of the box which is significant for their later lives.
because imagination is the basis for creation and innovation, one can’t achieve more in any aspects without it. apart from that, learning painting could be the best way to teach kids to appreciate beauty and therefore to treasure life.
雅思口语part3 被认为是debate的形式，如果答案准备的不够全面充分就很可能会遇到被考官“质疑”追着问的情况，所以如果在最开始的回答时就可以尽量完整，那就不会给考官留下“穷追猛打”的机会啦
雅思作文批改篇七
一、“占比”数据的描写饼状图的基本特征是，在一个整体里，也就是一个饼里，表示了若干个元素的比例关系，比例的总和是100%。
雅思作文批改(十一篇)
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